The storyline does not make any sense, there is no real game play involved, the spelling in the text is horrible, the character design is very low quality and disproportional, and there are no real choices to make. I thought it would get better as it went on, but even the ending was anticlimactic to say the least. For the next one try to concentrate on the story first and what you want the "player" to get out of playing your game.